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Re: Death of an Athiest, and Death of a Thiest
Hello! I think your poem is well-written. I assume it's all one poem, as it wouldn't have the same effect if they were seperated. Your rhyming is good and it ...
Jan 31, 2010 -
Re: Perfect
Hello! Not only was this quite long, but the lines themselves were pretty long, too. Someone once said that if a poem only has three good lines, it should only ...
Jan 31, 2010 -
Re: Tick Tock
Hello! The first thing that springs to my mind when reading this is that you're relying a lot on the font and colour of your poem, perhaps more than you ...
Jan 31, 2010 -
Re: The YWS UK Map
Milton Keynes is closest for me, too. I feel semi-famous.
Jan 28, 2010 -
Re: If lightbulbs were alive...
Haha, wow! We're all really weird. :lol:
Jan 28, 2010 -
Re: The YWS UK Map
Hooray! Never heard of Edgbaston though.
Jan 27, 2010 -
Re: Beautiful Scars
Hello! This is pretty good. It's difficult for me to relate to, not being a Christian, but I like you metaphor - I'm a sucker for a good extended metaphor ...
Jan 26, 2010 -
Re: 1.15.10
Hello! I really, really like this. Your imagery is great and it just sounds wonderful, too. I've read a lot of rhyming poetry lately, which is okay, but it makes ...
Jan 26, 2010 -
Re: Willow Tree
Hello! I really like this. :) I like your simile here: "I'll climb its gnarled branches,/to its highest peak/like a bird gazing over the world" but I think the way ...
Jan 26, 2010 -
Re: YWS Super Reviewing Bash on January 31, 2010
RSVP!
Jan 26, 2010 -
Re: Natural Disaster
Hello! I quite enjoyed this. The topic is pretty overdone but you did put an interesting spin on it with the weather metaphor. What I really enjoyed about your poem ...
Jan 25, 2010 -
Re: Carnival People
I really like this. It flows well, but what I really like is the ending - it really made me think. Very interesting. Your rhyming is good but at times ...
Jan 24, 2010 -
Re: You Just Have To Find Me
I like this. It has a slight element of suspense - I wanted to know who you were talking to, and who you were, and then when you revealed it, ...
Jan 24, 2010 -
Re: Im Finally me.
This is nice. :) Short and sweet, which seems to be your style. But you say you wrote this at the park, well, I think it could be even better ...
Jan 24, 2010 -
Re: You broke me.
This is okay. The middle two lines should probably rhyme like the rest because it braks the flow a bit, and you need to check for spelling mistakes, otherwise people ...
Jan 24, 2010
